I'm struggling a little bit on how to outline my essay. I have never been the type to outline and preview everything I am going to write. Ever since High School, I have always been able to write out my essays first and then I go back and piece together, rewrite, and fix where necessary because it is easier for me to think about what I am writing that way. I've never been a "plan ahead" type of student so all feedback is very much welcomed, and needed.
Thesis statement: The Needle Exchange is a program where drug users can exchange a dirty needle for a clean, and even though it seems to support drug addicts, the positive benefits of doing so has outweighed the negatives.
Thesis statement: The Needle Exchange is a program where drug users can exchange a dirty needle for a clean, and even though it seems to support drug addicts, the positive benefits of doing so has outweighed the negatives.
i. What the program offer
a. HIV and HIV testing, vaccines
b. Brochures to get help/treatment
c. They give something to the users in case of an overdose
a. HIV and HIV testing, vaccines
b. Brochures to get help/treatment
c. They give something to the users in case of an overdose
ii. Overview on how successful the program has been for the city.
Conclusion:
Though it seems that The Needle Exchange is enabling and providing needles for drug users, the amount of needles that they have kept off the streets, out of playgrounds, dumpsters and public places in general were increasingly different than the needles being left on the ground. The Needle Exchange may appear to help drug addicts, but with this program less diseases are being spread, less needles are being stolen from stores, and they still try to help them with their addiction and get their life back.
a. Statistics on how many needles were returned over received
b. How many needles were found on the street since the program started
b. How many needles were found on the street since the program started
d. c. Number of people who have gotten help because of the treatments and brochures they had out.
ii iii. Quotes from The Needle Exchange workers, negative impacts
a. What their thoughts on this program is
b. Increase number of drug users
c. This type of program could be enabling to drug users.
d. Information on how many needles are stolen from stores because they do not have a way to get clean needles.
a. What their thoughts on this program is
b. Increase number of drug users
c. This type of program could be enabling to drug users.
d. Information on how many needles are stolen from stores because they do not have a way to get clean needles.
Conclusion:
Though it seems that The Needle Exchange is enabling and providing needles for drug users, the amount of needles that they have kept off the streets, out of playgrounds, dumpsters and public places in general were increasingly different than the needles being left on the ground. The Needle Exchange may appear to help drug addicts, but with this program less diseases are being spread, less needles are being stolen from stores, and they still try to help them with their addiction and get their life back.
I'm the same style of writer, as you. I tend to lean toward fleshing out a draft and then revising that draft after I've written it. In looking at your outline, you have a good start. The second topic, success in the city, should include information that really highlights how successful the plan is not only in PA, but also in other cities as well. This would be something to consider as you work through the process. I am curious if the needle exchange can also help poverty stricken diabetics, as well or if the focus is only on drug users.
ReplyDeleteIn the portion of the outline about "quotes" from the workers, should really be relabeled to "opposing arguments for the program," as it is much more than "quotes."
I've heard of this program, but I think I would lean more toward concerns of the program as we already have a large drug problem, does this enable users? We're not like Seattle or Portland, where I can walk down a street and see plenty of thrown away, used needles, on the ground. However, I have found syringes at Dream Park, before, which makes me sad and concerned, as a parent with young children.
Good points, though, Samantha, and looking forward to reading your paper.